First Draft Feedback

We have now finished our first draft, we decided it would be a good idea to share our first drafts with our class mates to receive some feedback from them as they will be able to give us more critical feedback as they are first time viewers. 

After we held 2 viewings of our trailer this was the positive feedback we received on what they felt worked well:
-They felt the soundtracks we used worked well together and were good as they allowed the pace of our trailer to progress and build up to an adrenaline filled climax.
-They liked the intertitles as we incorporate an aspect of our film into them (the barn).
-They liked the way we built up from a conversation at the beginning of our trailer and ended with a fast paced action filled section.
-They said how our section of quick cuts with a series of fade to blacks onto the barn worked very well.

However we also had some criticisms which were:
-They felt the one of our fade to blacks between a shot reverse shot at the beginning of our trailers made it confusing and didn't add to the film.
-They couldn't hear the conversation between our actors at the end of the trailer as the music was too loud.
-Our audience were split on opinion on whether or not our voice over worked due to the American accent.
-They couldn't see the relevance of our title in our trailer.

After taking these suggestions for improvement in to consideration we decided to make the following changes as we agreed with their comments:

-We simply took out the fade to black between the shot reverse shot and upon reflection it helped to make the conversation a lot clearer.
-We used an expendational fade out for the music at the end of the trailer to make sure you can now here the final conversation.
-We re-done the voice recording with a British accent rather than the American one.
-We actually decided to change our title to D.O.B as it is much more relevant to the narrative in our story having the date of birth as the title, our audience agreed with the decision.

This process was very good as without it we may not have picked up on these simple but very important changes that will dramatically effect the overall end result of our trailer.